Johnny, How did you know?

Tips For racial profiling (by BigBadJohnny)

My friend,

How did you know all these things? It looks like a case of just answering the police officer in a manner just to save one's skin. But after that, what? And how can you be so sure of your liberty after mouthing out lies?

Why should I deny that I believe in a Supreme Being? Will the police take my lie for his question?

Oh, Johnny, come on! You're like one teaching children with lollypops still in their mouths. Have you forgotten that people now stand more for their rights, and speak out their minds? Are you not tired of being bullied that long? I would rather tell the truth than expect lies to protect me.

Here's to freedom!

3 Principles to Overcoming Schizophrenia

FOR BrambleCat (writing.com)

Comment: Principle 1 is stated well. It is acknowledging the presence of everyone in space with equal rights on equal footing. This principle is properly one that should apply to everyone.

Principle 2 - You will still exist at the end of the day.

Comment: How can you be so sure? We do not own our tomorrows – let alone today. We are but a vapor that in a moment can just be gone. At best, this is only trying to baby-pat the patient, trying to assure her of something that is not sure to be there.

What would be more assuring is to find out how one is “encapsulated by one’s body.” This means finding out that one is more than flesh and bones and what this all means in the whole scheme of things. Then one can truly know one’s place in the sun instead of just self-assurance that indeed one exists.

Principle 2 -You will still exist at the end of the day - you are encapsulated by your body. Focus on this to retain your sense of self. No matter what happens, it won't kill you (by destroying your sense of 'self') - you'll always be you.

Comment: One’s sense of true self can only come from truth – not what one thinks she is. This then needs referring to judgement from one of higher existence who is fit to judge the person and has to do with her existence. And who could this be but her engineer – her maker who knows her through and through?

One of the best things afforded human beings is the capacity to change for good. So, to seek shelter from this freedom is comforting enough that a person cannot always be herself. A person is not naturally good and not infinitely bad that she needs to change now and then.

Psychologist Ronald Bassman, once diagnosed and treated for schizophrenia, said, “When you become a mental patient, you are no longer regarded as a whole person.” Your suggestions may have come from this common perception and you deserve empathy for your pointers. The best doctor we have, however, and the one that can assure us acceptance and love without conditions is no one but our maker. Let us seek His solace because what man offers is lacking. Having done that, we can be strong enough to face the world.

No matter what happens it won't kill you.

Comment: What is the “it?” Schizophrenia? Let me re-direct this: No matter what happens, we have this much acceptance and love from our maker, the one who judges everyone and whose judgement is righteous and just – no matter who we are. This much we can expect.

Principle 3: YOU DO NOT KNOW WHAT OTHER PEOPLE WILL SAY IN ADVANCE. When you pose an idea or ask a question, do not allow yourself to visualize what they will say – do….

Comment: Yes, don’t anticipate. Do not denigrate yourself. Not everyone in this world is cruel. Some people understand. Some people have loving minds and thinking hearts. It is possible, and not everything is lost.

General comment: This is a piece that tries to reach out to schizophrenics. I commend your efforts in making your writing useful. Not every writer would do that. It could readily be seen that you are privy to the lives of those suffering from schizophrenia, and know their needs.

I suggest that you dig deeper into your memories to arrange and reinforce your principles. I can also see that you can develop this into an essay rather than enumerating principles. Start by defining what Schizophrenia is, medically. Then you can progress by describing what Schizophrenia is to people in general and what Schizophrenia means to the patient. Point out the differences without directly comparing. Then recap with a definition and description of a recommended outlook on Schizophrenics (Who but the maker has the proper outlook?). Finally, you can add your modified principles.

A Letter of Deep Feelings

Feelings inside bursting like lava of a volcano
A Letter of Deep Feelings"
FOR Alimohkon (writing.com)

This is an entirely different genre from the two write-ups on writing that you earlier wrote with this bunch. There is nothing that binds them with your title "Lollypops and Kisses." First, Lollypops can only refer to this letter as it is about family. It can only apply to writing in the sense of growing up as a budding one - but you sound like one knowing the ropes.

This piece talks mainly about property. I suggest you find other ways of making it stand alone. Re-write it not entirely as a letter. Your reader will then expand to not just your "Sister" whom you are addressing. Then it can become more useful.

An interesting way is to color it with the theme of social responsibility. Start your write-up talking about this thing, for example, about property dividing families. Your letter can then be integrated in the middle or at the end - after you have sufficiently discussed your theme.

Lazy Writing (Edited lazily)
FOR Alimohkon (writing.com)

This piece is a combination of advice to budding writers and some philosophical musings. Nice writing! However, for the purpose of publication, editors would prefer writing that has focus. To make them see meaningful ends, I suggest that you make the best of both worlds: separate your advice and philosophy and develop each of them. They both can stand on their own merits, given some more flesh and direction.

Lollypops & Kisses (My Essays)"
FOR Alimohkon

Shades of male chauvinism! You may read amusing to your kind (har-de-har-har for you) but to the opposite gender, you will sound negative. I suggest you re-direct your funny bone to the taste of your target readership. Principle of homophily, you know. Didn't you want the Eve side of the family to read this? Or did you want to keep them out? Then, retain your Viagra laugh.

You can be funny and eat your cake, too. This is your door. Make it a little pleasant. And I thought you were serving coffee?